a slightly more tactful version of this would be perfect. could be seen as defensive or untactful, i would tone it down a bit but still love the overall vibe. I like the last part about responsibility for your spirituality and that, insightful.
Renee2011-12-29
My poem
To you,my dear lover,my friend my everything in this life
To you ,to us, forever my wife.
Youve brought me something no one else could have given.
You brought me hope, because before my life was wrongly driven.
You were there when i had nobody else to turn to,
your were there when i was at my darkest blue.
You were the one that brought me this gift,
you were the one that made my spirit lift.
For that I thank you,and vow to you,to us,
through the happy times,the hard and all the fuss.
I love you, so much, forever and always,
till the end of days.
Ill be there for you,as you will for me,
our love ,is for everyone to see.
Jeremy Vargas2011-11-09
good
i think the part about failing marriages is a wake up call. its the truth and i like it. The rest of the poem is beatiful.
jasmine2009-04-24
Beautiful
I have not seen such a beautiful poem in a long time. The words are deep and for anyone who follows that message, rest assured things will work out for you and your partner.
Liz2008-08-07
exactly how it is
this poem is so true! i agree with everything. we have to find happiness within ourselves first and not rely on the other person to make us happy.
second time around2008-06-08
lovely
I dont like the last part about taking responsibility for your spirituallity and that
rachael2008-03-04
I agree
The poem is lovely. But i do agree with the lastcomment. That verse makes a positive poemsomewhat negative, as nobody goes into a marriage thinking about it failing. Not tomention that my mother and father are divorced. Lord knows how that would make them feel.
AUGTINAH2007-07-24
good
...but I don't like the verse about failed marriages. I think this would upset or offend those in the audience who are recently separated or have been divorced. I would use this and take that verse out.
Strong and committed
a slightly more tactful version of this would be perfect. could be seen as defensive or untactful, i would tone it down a bit but still love the overall vibe. I like the last part about responsibility for your spirituality and that, insightful.
Renee 2011-12-29
My poem
To you,my dear lover,my friend my everything in this life
To you ,to us, forever my wife.
Youve brought me something no one else could have given.
You brought me hope, because before my life was wrongly driven.
You were there when i had nobody else to turn to,
your were there when i was at my darkest blue.
You were the one that brought me this gift,
you were the one that made my spirit lift.
For that I thank you,and vow to you,to us,
through the happy times,the hard and all the fuss.
I love you, so much, forever and always,
till the end of days.
Ill be there for you,as you will for me,
our love ,is for everyone to see.
Jeremy Vargas 2011-11-09
good
i think the part about failing marriages is a wake up call. its the truth and i like it. The rest of the poem is beatiful.
jasmine 2009-04-24
Beautiful
I have not seen such a beautiful poem in a long time. The words are deep and for anyone who follows that message, rest assured things will work out for you and your partner.
Liz 2008-08-07
exactly how it is
this poem is so true! i agree with everything. we have to find happiness within ourselves first and not rely on the other person to make us happy.
second time around 2008-06-08
lovely
I dont like the last part about taking responsibility for your spirituallity and that
rachael 2008-03-04
I agree
The poem is lovely. But i do agree with the lastcomment. That verse makes a positive poemsomewhat negative, as nobody goes into a marriage thinking about it failing. Not tomention that my mother and father are divorced. Lord knows how that would make them feel.
AUGTINAH 2007-07-24
good
...but I don't like the verse about failed marriages. I think this would upset or offend those in the audience who are recently separated or have been divorced. I would use this and take that verse out.
ToWedInAug 2007-03-14
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